| 2007-12-16 21:09:52 |
Jayna the Genie
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wow realy good cant wait tell the secend one 10/10 |
| 2007-12-16 21:19:27 |
Jayna the Genie
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This story was great, keep it up fuck all of them haters, true potential, nice and original, nice job |
| 2007-12-16 21:53:20 |
Jayna the Genie
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great story bro definitly make a part two |
| 2007-12-16 22:36:45 |
Jayna the Genie
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like most sex stories this focused entirely on intense sex acts, leaving many unchecked dramatical errors and shoddy dialoge. All you realy need to do is review your work and you can make very decent stories. |
| 2007-12-16 23:00:48 |
Jayna the Genie
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Awesome story! Keep it up and can't wait for part 2! |