| 2007-12-10 10:04:51 |
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Not readable, poor grammar distracts one from making sense of the sentences. |
| 2007-12-10 10:58:25 |
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wtf |
| 2007-12-10 13:03:53 |
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No follow thru FTL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!... |
| 2007-12-10 16:36:49 |
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what the hell?
it's gIrl, not gurl, maybe once i could forgive as a typo, but not everytime...and you apologising at the start for taking a long time makes me laugh, it's like you actually put effort into writing that!
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| 2007-12-10 22:38:00 |
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ok start, but you forgot to right the story |