| 2004-07-10 15:50:16 |
Back Country Tales: The Changing
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Too many characters. The style resembles the blurb on porno videos. Incoherent. |
| 2004-07-10 15:50:16 |
Back Country Tales: The Changing
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Too many characters. The style resembles the blurb on porno videos. Incoherent. |
| 2004-07-11 05:16:44 |
Back Country Tales: The Changing
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Correction: If you read the first part of the story it does make sense. The story is well-written. I read this part first late at night and it gave a me headache because it didn't make sense. You should label it part 2 or something. The sex was pretty hot but may have lacked some build-up. But then again rape is just like that: quick, fuck-and-go. This part reveals the characters as a bunch of hayseed rednecks. The 'good guys' and the Hardy boys are all cut from the same cloth. You hurt my woman now I rape your sister and mother. Brilliant. You sucked your brother therefore you would suck anyone ! Even more brilliant. Having the victim start enjoying it is such an awesome touch that I think we should all go out and start raping people. Part 1 was better. |
| 2004-07-11 17:51:35 |
Back Country Tales: The Changing
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wow |
| 2004-07-16 02:06:18 |
Back Country Tales: The Changing
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sorry Zeppelin but jack sprat is right once again..its sounds to me as though you may have been trying something a little different with this story because it didnt sound like anything you've ever written before. i do think sprat may have been a little to harsh in some of his comments but i do agree with the fact that the first one was much better and i dont really like the plot of this one very much..it seems sort of pointless in a way because the "good guys" have infact become the bad guys and it'll just keep going back and forth with them seeking revenge on eachother. boring. |