| 2006-05-25 19:29:25 |
A Boy and A girl_(0)
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It is good but make it more big. |
| 2006-11-17 15:12:36 |
A Boy and A girl_(0)
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i didnt even get past the introduction. your grammar sucks, go back to first grade, if you arent already there. |
| 2004-07-09 07:09:00 |
Dear Diary...
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One of the best I've read on this site. Good to have a more mature story instead of the infantile teen stuff. Write some more. Aren't you going to fuck her arse? |
| 2004-07-09 11:17:14 |
Dear Diary...
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we write about infantile settings because they're more exciting and I personally just write what I know. This was different though. . . . . . . .the woman was slightly repulsive. Maybe when I'm an old one I'll like stories like this. sorry, story sukt. |
| 2004-07-09 13:02:52 |
Dear Diary...
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Oh 'Zeppelin' I know you are a teenager because you've made comments on my stories before and I admire your candour. Thanks for your honestly made comments. I appreciate what you say and how you say it. I've read some of your stuff and I wouldn't attempt to patronise you; we're just looking at the same themes from different angles and eras. This particular story wasn't really aimed at young lads like you but if you continue to take a look at what I'm writing from time to time I'll do the same for you .... OK? And '60spervert' you too have graced my stories with your comments which I also appreciate. 'Zep' can write for his generation and I'll write for all generations in turn. You can only appreciate the present and the past if you've been in both! |