sexstories.com
Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2004-10-09 03:22:14 | Loved by Brother | I believe you have done well. A hard rock cock would be the proof. 1. improve on the dialogs and thoughts, i wanna hear more what da girl thinks. 2. improve on the flow of the story, ie some teasing maybe? |
| 2004-12-04 01:16:00 | Loved by Brother | Not bad. The spacing needs work and the editing could be better. I think there are two major problems: too short and too unrealistic. Work on them. |
| 2004-12-07 19:49:26 | Loved by Brother | pretty good story for a first timer next time a little mor detail and a bit longer |
| 2004-12-15 13:01:37 | Loved by Brother | Nice, but a little unrealistic, considering that they got down to buisness almost emeditly after the brother falls in. a little more hesitation would be better, but a good start none the less. |
| 2005-01-25 02:31:38 | Loved by Brother | it is a litltle unreal just a bit but if rachel is a total slut then its okay... |