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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2004-07-26 15:20:30 | Josh & Kylie go Paintballing | It was okay, Decent story, and detail, but the quality needs to be improved a bit. Obviously, your not an author. |
| 2004-07-27 00:10:59 | Josh & Kylie go Paintballing | er..i enjoy long stories....but only if they are good....this one is not......i skipped all the boring shit in the middle and red the ending....and im guessing this is ur first story....and hopefully the last |
| 2004-07-27 04:15:22 | Josh & Kylie go Paintballing | Hey, cool, I liked it, you didn't over do the discription, you played them both well, the brother was a little bit too submissive tho, otherwise, good job. |
| 2004-07-27 18:33:51 | Josh & Kylie go Paintballing | Thanks for your comments. A few points.: (1)The story was written as it was a fantasy for a couple who emailed me about another story i`d written so I tried to include as much detail as they wanted.This made it longer than most of my other stories. (2) Where exactly did I mention whips and chains? (3) If people didn`t read large bits how do they know it was boring? (4) No I won`t kill myself. I started writing on here hoping to bring a bit of enjoyment to some people and hopefully that has happened. (5) Constructive critisism is welcome. If you find it boring. Why? What are the boring bits? Is it because it is not sex action constantly from start to finish or some other reason. Just to say it`s boring or make sarcastic remarks won`t help improve future stories of mine or other people |
| 2004-07-27 20:32:59 | Josh & Kylie go Paintballing | As a published author myself, I just wanted to let you know that your writing shows definite talent and promise. First of all, I experienced something very similar to the story in my, ah, younger days, so the subject interests me. Your sentence structure is basically sound, your spelling is excellent. Your punctuation is also quite good, with a few noticable exceptions-a period instead of a dash, that sort of thing. Overall, young man, well done. Bravo. Remember, write because you love to write, not because you have to. |