| 2005-01-02 06:34:19 |
Denise's Degredation 3
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I love stories where we girls have to do what we're told, forced to get on our knees and suck. And being shared...hmmm. Very nice, especially at the office where anyone might see. |
| 2005-01-04 19:44:17 |
Denise's Degredation 3
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ooh~~ nice story.. made me cum at least five times |
| 2005-01-06 13:30:44 |
Denise's Degredation 3
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Great Story, Love To Read More, Hope It Get's Even More Nastier, And More Humuliating. I Would Also Like To Help Yoy With More Story Line's. |
| 2005-02-26 16:18:37 |
Denise's Degredation 3
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Hot, overall--but you've got to get a handle on the many language and grammar mistakes laced throug this thing--all three parts--if you've got ideas of ever taking your stuff anywhere but here. Most reputable erotica sites require thorough editing before they allow fiction to be posted. Sadly, those types of errors make good story ideas, like yours, difficult to read when actually written into story form. |
| 2005-09-29 02:39:24 |
Denise's Degredation 3
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The premise was good, but too many guys having her sexually against her free will began to make your story lose impact by the third rape. Slow it down and forget all the guards taking her. Each of the first three could have taken her a different way, wtih #2 forcing her to take oral further than she ever had with her own husband, and #3 raping her virginal young ass. Stress repeatedly that she was a faithfu married woman, caught up in forced sex because of blackmail. P.S. Forget Orchid's knocking your grammar and language. Check out the spelling, improper use of commas, and lack of capital letters beginning sentences on Orchid's comments! Keep submitting, but make rapes like enjoying a bottle of fine wine, not as if slamming down a quick six-pack of cheap beer! |