| 2004-12-29 17:47:34 |
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Great storry! |
| 2004-12-30 00:07:12 |
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All of y'all are critisizing me. and negative comments are welcome. Maybe the negatives aren't jealous they can't get any maybe the think I can't get any. but of course maybes are worthless. |
| 2004-12-30 06:41:50 |
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Decent story, watch the tense your words are in. You switched from past to present too often. The story itself was decent and pretty good. |
| 2004-12-30 20:31:56 |
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I know there are lots of flaws. There are much more than y'all have commented on but the truth is I just didn't like this story enough to fix it. |
| 2004-12-31 01:40:24 |
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great story,u should make more like that the next title should be (my babysister Part 2)and if u can,make it longer,i mean this one was long,but make a real long one! |