| 2005-06-06 10:52:37 |
Kristen and the Band Room_(1)
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I've never before read such an awful written story... Nice idea, but terrible writing!!! |
| 2005-06-10 01:41:36 |
Kristen and the Band Room_(1)
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8 1/2 what the fuck!? thats bullshit. And rewrite with grammer mother fucker |
| 2005-06-13 08:56:35 |
Kristen and the Band Room_(1)
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The story content was pretty good, but the grammar started to get annoying and took away from the story at times. Work on this and your stories will be much better. The 8.5 inch dick this is a bit surreal but hey it could happen, Good overall, just work on grammar. 8/10 |
| 2005-07-04 02:43:55 |
Kristen and the Band Room_(1)
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i agree. Good story: very bad grammar |
| 2005-07-13 02:58:33 |
Kristen and the Band Room_(1)
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All these people are making fun of the grammer of the story yet their grammer is terrible in their comments |