| 2004-12-26 12:29:54 |
Kellys story - seducing my dad
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that wa a great story make more in the serires |
| 2005-01-13 05:47:50 |
Kellys story - seducing my dad
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*clapz* Well done |
| 2005-02-03 23:37:26 |
Kellys story - seducing my dad
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GREAT story, but it could have been about 20 strokes longer.....Most stories do end to quickly just when things are getting gooooood!!! |
| 2005-03-02 09:20:26 |
Kellys story - seducing my dad
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A few punctuations would have been nice. I couldn't get to the end because of the format, it may have been hot but you need to go back to 3rd grade and learn the basics. |
| 2005-05-10 15:15:48 |
Kellys story - seducing my dad
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Punctuation and spelling errors / great plot / you capture lust & want very well / barely believable, but that's okay / definitely got me ready to get fucked / look forward to reading more. |