| 2005-01-09 03:09:11 |
First time is the most special
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ummmmmmmm ya you know that virgins have a hymen right? that the guy has to break through and it hurts girls pretty badly. you should have explained that a bit better instead of started fucking her. and towards the end it went way to fast you need to slow it down a bit. but other than that its pretty good |
| 2005-01-10 05:57:49 |
First time is the most special
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I rate this 10/10 why? heres why. this story has perfect grammar, perfect spelling and a good storyline (in fact a great storyline). This has a bit of romance tthat leads to sex. The description of the fact first time is special is a great way to describe this story. People who write stories are either not good enough or they just have a gay way of doing them (except for the stories I like, look at my comments for the other stories). In conclusion the perfect story to read if you want to get horny and romance into you. |
| 2005-01-10 17:27:05 |
First time is the most special
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That was the stupidest thing i've ever read, 2 bad it didn't really happen 2 u! |
| 2005-01-11 23:09:55 |
First time is the most special
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Hey man, you have to watch the tense shift in the beginning of the story. It switches from past tense to present and back. |
| 2005-01-12 21:20:29 |
First time is the most special
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you know what i hate. not this story, it's okay. i hate it when people post comments about the authors grammer and fuck up on their own spelling. maybe it's just me, but i sence a bit of hipocracy on this site. |