| 2005-01-19 23:55:10 |
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It was a good story and i liked the way you started it off but you really didnt need to make this into two chapters. I liked your detail and descriptions and for once a story on this site had a plot and not some random fucking. Good Work. 9/10 |
| 2005-01-20 04:30:28 |
Transfer Student
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Nice 9/10 |
| 2005-01-20 13:36:39 |
Transfer Student
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fucken awesome 10/10 |
| 2005-01-20 18:54:09 |
Transfer Student
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Agree with Eagle. Got confused with the his hers etc... Could have helped with introducing Toms name at the start. Mind you, never known a girl to be called Adrian (only Adrienne) so that threw me a bit at first too! Not bad though. Alothough I'm not sure a guy just tellin a girl he'd rip her shirt off would really be enough for her to strip for him. I know I'd rather take a beating than be raped (as hot as it can be in stories) |
| 2005-01-20 19:45:00 |
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Came during the sex with stteve scene, and the rape 1.. 9/10 |