| 2005-11-09 13:23:47 |
Sexual Encounters Ch. 02
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Well, you know, when they were at the swingers party Andy did not live with Joyce, yet they got a phone call from the couple that he gave the number to? Did they call his mom's house first? You repeated some of the paragraphs, I sugest that you proof-read your story first, that way you will get higher ratings. Don't get me wrong, I liked it, just that you should be a bit more carefull of that. |
| 2008-02-16 15:36:46 |
Sexual Encounters Ch. 02
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Good sequence of stories. Definately do at least one more. Get Joyce pregnut and married, get mom and Mr. gregory involved with Joyce and Andy. |
| 2005-02-14 07:16:26 |
My Teacher_(0)
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good story. had something like that happen to me, but not with a teacher, my ex-girl friends sister |
| 2005-02-14 08:19:03 |
My Teacher_(0)
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Geo, compared to your other shithouse stories this is absolutely excellent. Your detail was good, if a little short, and you set the scene well with no spelling or grammar mistakes and managed to make the story really hot. Well Done! |
| 2005-02-14 14:22:02 |
My Teacher_(0)
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I agree with Sock Man, although I did like some of ur other work. good detail, good way of setting the scene, and no grammatical or spelling errors. The story itself was awesome. |