2005-03-21 17:26:31 |
My Sister's Friends
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good stuff--- write more-- dont switch narratives, give some more details about the girls and the action... other than that- nice job |
2005-03-21 17:44:14 |
My Sister's Friends
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Like the others, good story, keep it in either first or third person, and write more... |
2005-03-21 18:30:39 |
My Sister's Friends
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That is one hell og a story... I got half erection |
2005-03-21 22:20:16 |
My Sister's Friends
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your story was good but you need more and better details, more excitement .looking forward to seeing more from you. |
2005-03-21 23:40:28 |
My Sister's Friends
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Well done story but anatomically incorrect. No woman can take a 14" dick. About 7" would be absolute max. |