| 2005-09-03 18:47:34 |
Take Your Kid To Work Day
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Fucking A+ story man |
| 2005-09-03 23:00:36 |
Take Your Kid To Work Day
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An 18 yo writing about a 14 yo with the skill of a 12 yo. Perhaps you should try actually losing your virginity before you try to write erotic stories. I would call you an amature, but that would be an insult to amatures. try again without the lame cliches, juvenile dialogue, and for christs sake get laid a couple of times. There is no such thing as a slut, just girls that like sex as much as guys, if people like you keep insulting them, then people like you will be relagated to nothing but cybersex for the rest of your life (which might not be a bad thing). Try again. |
| 2005-09-04 01:01:21 |
Take Your Kid To Work Day
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ok douche bags for all you guys commenting..what the fuck are you doing reading these stories anyway you are either nerdy fags or dads who have only had sex once and think they know everything or your just young little kids like 15 masturbating to anything you read so you know what Douche bags leave him alone and let him write what he wants and im sure this is his "FIRST" story so give him a fucking brake faggets |
| 2005-09-04 01:49:52 |
Take Your Kid To Work Day
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holy shit that was great and not bad for ur first story not to sound mean but use less verbal abuse in the beginning it makes it look better cant wait for another. |
| 2005-09-04 14:32:47 |
Take Your Kid To Work Day
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it was good. very good actually except for the whole." she licked the shit off her finger thing" besides that A+ 10/10 |