| 2005-09-05 21:29:42 |
Take Your Kid To Work Day
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SUCKED U SUCK!!!! |
| 2005-09-08 01:58:40 |
Take Your Kid To Work Day
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You limp dicks have no knowledge of nature. I started fucking girls in 6th grade when we were 11 years old. My son is now 14, has a 8" cock and we share the 13-14y.o girls he brings home. They all talk dirty and fuck every way they can. If you haven't tried it, don't knock it. 10/10 |
| 2005-09-08 17:11:20 |
Take Your Kid To Work Day
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Well, since it's your first story, I'll cut you some slack. you have lots of room for improvement in most areas of your writing. avoid clichés like fainting from the sight of a beautiful girls and "instantly" doing anything, including cumming in your pants. Your enjoyment of slutty sex is a little lowbrow, and I desperately hope that doesn't reflect your real life preferences. Be sure that you don't switch verb tenses from past to present. Your mechanics (grammar, puncuation, paragraph structure, spelling) are mostly good, and a lot better than some stories I've read. You have potential. Try writing as story about someone who isn't a sexual superman. Giant penises are acceptable, but three orgasms on one erection is beyond belief. |
| 2005-09-08 21:42:32 |
Take Your Kid To Work Day
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gosh i wish i could meet someone my age with that big of a cock try make it a little more realistic |
| 2005-09-08 22:08:55 |
Take Your Kid To Work Day
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Just a dirty story --- nothing more. And a very poor one at that. I was waiting for you to drag her home by her hair, to your cave. |