| 2005-11-24 04:17:50 |
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Very sweet, very innocent; I loved it!
The first girl who dry-humped me like that totally blew my mind. I married her.
Good mechanics, good structure; It's a story written by someone who can write!
Keep it up. This is definitely a good addition to the site. |
| 2005-11-24 20:43:20 |
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Nicely done. 6/10 |
| 2005-11-25 18:41:01 |
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Nicely done, it reminded me of my youth. You should right more. |
| 2005-11-27 15:01:05 |
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Pretty good. Oogman is still a hideous looking, no talent asshole. I really want to know what stories he has written. He's a chicken dick sucker. |
| 2005-11-28 11:32:11 |
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That is a great story, well written, beautifully balanced, thoughtful.
10/10 |