| 2005-10-07 11:56:29 |
Salem's Trial
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that was awesome |
| 2005-10-07 11:57:30 |
Salem's Trial
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It....was...a...pretty...go... the premise was great, but you never really put Salem in my head, the description was kind of brief. The sex was also kind of passed over quickly. The main charecter has a good voice, and the setting was very engaging. This read like a draft, go through and add details, clean up the dialogue a little, and rerelease it (kind of like the talking heads boxed set). Good work, keep it up. |
| 2005-10-07 18:34:00 |
Salem's Trial
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I have to say that I'm inpressed, and that i know someone alot like your main character, Justin. Except his name is Luke, but the same idea and her name was/is Embi. |
| 2005-10-07 21:39:12 |
Salem's Trial
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Thanks for the tips, and yes I think I will reveiw and change some. there were parts I did not like, now that I look at it. |
| 2006-04-29 01:12:27 |
Salem's Trial
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I liked it alot. Please write more like this. Us girls like them alot. :) |