| 2005-11-04 00:04:10 |
daddy's and my secret
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not to bad...grammer wasn't the best but the story gets the job done |
| 2005-11-05 08:20:57 |
daddy's and my secret
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decent story, sure ur grammer and spelling isnt great, but ITS A PORN STORY PEOPLE GET OVER IT |
| 2005-11-07 01:24:32 |
daddy's and my secret
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You opened up with an age and a bra size, bad start, you are obviously a guy. You did not bother to mention where a 15 yo got a dildo or how the psychic stepdad knew she was jerking off in her room. The story comes across as a haphazard, lazy effort. Try again. |
| 2005-11-07 23:37:48 |
daddy's and my secret
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Not a bad story. I'm not into the dog thing, and your dad should have been more understanding and patient with you. He should have used the opportunity to teach you instead of raping you. But it could be a good chapter 2. |
| 2005-11-09 08:10:30 |
daddy's and my secret
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Did your step-dad keep fucking you? Shit, he's stupid if he didn't. Can I be one of your boyfriends? |