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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2005-12-07 07:23:33 | The House chapter 1 | Why did it take 4 years for Amanda to fuck him? Why didn't he cum the instant her mouth touched his dick? Where are the 2 "sisters"? At least his dick isn't some freakish length, like 10 or 12 inches, or more. There are no 16 yr olds that are without a clue anymore. Use spell check, it'll catch most errors that so many people complain about. |
| 2005-12-07 08:59:49 | The House chapter 1 | needs some more voyuerism and add one of those sister's to the mix'' but not all that bad for a first try |
| 2005-12-07 15:58:59 | The House chapter 1 | You really need to learn to spell, and punctuate, with a side lesson in composition. You have a good story line, and you've a lot writing to complete the series. so, keep at it. U gotta 5 because of spelling. r |
| 2005-12-07 19:31:12 | The House chapter 1 | wat da fuck why does every one say "ohhh im about to cum" my girlfriend nvr says that when i fuck her and she cums... she just moans alot |
| 2005-12-07 20:29:50 | The House chapter 1 | Good, but terrible grammar, 9/10 |