| 2005-12-05 20:07:54 |
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ur grammer sucks but god story 9/10 |
| 2005-12-05 20:47:31 |
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A few spelling lessons and proper grammatical use of words wouldn't hurt, Marc. But you had the right idea for a good erotic tale. For that you get a 7/10. |
| 2005-12-05 20:48:28 |
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Wasn't bad 9/10 grammer could be a bit better but the plot was really great. |
| 2005-12-06 02:44:48 |
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What is wrong with you guys that was lame. 3/10 at best |
| 2005-12-06 06:08:43 |
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Sockman, you're entitled to your critique. I guess those of us who liked the story figured the writer was on the right track. And, yes, proper grammar appears to be a thing of the past in all the xnxx stories. |