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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-08-06 16:26:48 | Home Alone Part 1 | what the fuck? you suck at writing |
| 2006-08-06 19:22:32 | Home Alone Part 1 | That was weak!! |
| 2006-08-07 13:53:21 | Home Alone Part 1 | it needs to flow more...i'm not gonna bag u on rape, cause i dun have a problem with it, its just needs more flowy grammar...and paragraphs. like "I've" instead of "I have"...cause kids wouldn't say "I have" |
| 2006-08-07 20:37:56 | Home Alone Part 1 | make her fuck her pt 2!!! |
| 2006-08-08 06:21:26 | Home Alone Part 1 | First, your story sucks nuts. I'm only reading it because I read part 2. Ok, so you like brutal rape. That makes you a sick fuck, but you're free to write about it. If you're going to write, act like you're trying. If she's a shy virgin, at least suggest why she shaves her pubes. If he is telling a friend to bring alcohol and condoms, presumably as part of a rape plan, have the friend actually show up! If she kicks him in the balls, he has to react to that or tell us about something like the shaolin testicle training that made his balls impervious to blunt force. Write in paragraphs. Writing is only part of the process. Rewriting and editing is even more important to the quality of the finished product. =Dreamer= |