| 2006-08-13 02:28:31 |
Home Alone Part 1
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rape is wrong, but you should do drafts in Word or something before you submit. You can just copy and paste it in you know. lol |
| 2006-08-14 09:49:28 |
Home Alone Part 1
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it was goo little too short but good but you no what i dont care about the rape but hes actually shoved a razor pin in her nipple now that was lame |
| 2006-08-16 07:40:36 |
Home Alone Part 1
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Not so good, my friend. So many errors that the flow was disrupted over and over. things like POV can not be ignored. But try some again. I think you'll do well. |
| 2006-12-29 02:54:39 |
Home Alone Part 1
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i have seen better porn stories written by drunken monkeys |
| 2006-01-03 02:50:03 |
Do Cowboys Wear Their Boots In Bed?
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No good. Has potential.. but over all bland. Your grammer needs working on, too-- but that can be ignored. |