| 2006-02-28 23:17:27 |
Kelly and Me
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Very good descriptive prose. You did a good job of putting us there. You were a little repetitive, especially the pronouns, which can be tough with only two charectors and no dialogue. You can break it up a little by inserting some random setting details in the narrative. Nonetheless, quality work. |
| 2006-03-02 06:11:46 |
Kelly and Me
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not bad . i think she should have been older . 6/10 |
| 2006-03-07 14:08:56 |
Kelly and Me
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This would be a great story if the girl was a little older... |
| 2006-03-19 05:10:23 |
Kelly and Me
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i liked that she was 10.... makes it so taboo |
| 2006-06-30 22:28:40 |
Kelly and Me
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this stiry wasso sexy and awesome |