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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-03-04 23:38:38 | girls of my life | complete crap |
| 2006-03-05 07:13:56 | girls of my life | This may be your first time writing a porn story, but it looks like it was your first time writing anything ever. it was almost painful to read. Please learn how to use commas. I don't understand your obsession with brand names. Details are good, but they have to be the right details. If your character is rich, but none of his friends know it, don't have him live in a house with a four-car garage and drive a Lincoln Navigator! Do you know how much those things cost? People don't just go around fingering their friends; if they have a special relationship, we really need to know about it for this to make sense. You really need to write more about the characters, not just their clothes. This has promise, but your style needs a *lot* of work. Peace. =Dreamer= |
| 2006-03-28 18:37:08 | girls of my life | good story but needs more relistism |
| 2006-03-28 18:38:28 | girls of my life | ok story |
| 2006-03-04 18:51:45 | Reformatory Girl | fuckin a, spaces please.. goddamn i hate things wihtout paragraphs.; |