| 2006-04-02 12:25:52 |
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Hey, eighthsin 1967, let me tell you something you demented fucked-up asshole. If I had you in front of me I'd knock your fucking tooth out (I'm sure that's all you have). If I want to comment on the wrongness of a father screwing his 14-year-old daughter, I'll do it, you sick sexually depraved dickheads notwithstanding. |
| 2006-04-02 12:33:39 |
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Hey you fuckwit nobody forced you to read it. If we like it then thats our choice and we dont need the likes of YOU to judge us. Your probably just disgusted because you enjoyed it too. These stories are FICTION! An outlet for our FANTASIES! You stupid fuck! |
| 2006-04-02 14:26:34 |
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Thanks for the feedback, especially the one about the story going from being coerced to enjoying it. Makes sense and I'll keep it in mind for my next one!
To the anonymous "reader" who would like to "knock my tooth out..." You're free to leave some contact info here...I'd be more than happy to give you the chance. |
| 2006-04-02 18:07:25 |
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its a little too long until you get into some action...
..and the action helped my masterbation. |
| 2006-04-02 23:27:22 |
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Eighthsin1967,
In my personal opinion, I find the way in which you write enjoyable. Description and the flow of words are just two things that can make or break a story and you have the capacity for both. My only suggestion would be to have a stronger editing procedure, if possible have a second person read through it as the typos were distracting. Oh yes, an after thought, like one of your readers I was very surprised to see you name the "Who's who" of the garment industry. |