| 2006-04-03 00:26:31 |
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I apologize for the typos and small sytax errors. Unfortunately, I don't have anyone who can proofread for me...kinda gotta keep this part of my life secret....lol As far as the"ads" for the manufacturer's in my story, just trying to paint as clear a mental picture for the readers as I can. Thanks for the feedback and your compliments. |
| 2006-04-03 01:58:32 |
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Certainly hot, erotic and mind bending. Woould have been more comfortable with picturing the happenings if the young gal had been depicted as being 18 instead of 14, and perhaps a niece or such instead of a daughter. As a concerned father of three daughters, I hestitate reading about a father/daughter relationship, especially since the story was so well written it evoked extremely erotic, realistic images |
| 2006-04-03 02:24:57 |
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fucked up cop........ |
| 2006-04-03 06:05:16 |
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Fantasy or not --- it's wrong for a father to set up his 14-year-old daughter for a fuck fest. |
| 2006-04-04 02:45:43 |
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I thought it was enjoyable. The writer has a command of story telling that few on here have. To those who had a problem with the content, well you did enter an incest room. What did you expect??? As a pure fantasy it was excellent! It ebbed and flowed the way a good yarn should. Congrats to the author and I look forward to more of your work!!! |