| 2006-04-10 06:54:01 |
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Lynn and her Daddy's exploits are continued in one of my new stories "Violation of Rachel." Hope you enjoy it! |
| 2006-04-10 14:06:45 |
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I am 12 and this made my pussy so fuckin wet |
| 2006-04-10 15:44:02 |
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12 y/o want daddy to help her....id' be ur daddy! |
| 2006-04-10 23:23:36 |
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Technically very well crafted. The dialogue was good, though I had a hard time buying the daughters age towards the end. Faily plausible premise. He was very believable. I still came away feeling like it would have been a bigger step even for a girl who had been around. Nonetheless, a good read and a model for how a story should look. Keep writing. |
| 2006-04-10 23:30:39 |
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Archaic....you make an outstanding point and even as I was writing it, I was thinking the same thing. 16 or 17 would have been much more believable...I totally agree. This story was written upon request and the age was specifically requested. I truly appreciate your feedback. Critical, yet respectful, friendly, and constructive! Hope you enjoy my others! |