| 2006-04-03 19:24:51 |
VampricLust
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mmm more!! that was sooo sexy |
| 2006-04-03 19:47:50 |
VampricLust
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Jeeeeezus, break up the story a little. Use more paragraphs. I got a fucking headache trying to read this thing. |
| 2006-04-03 22:34:46 |
VampricLust
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It was a great story. But you had about 24534534 run on sentences in there. And that kid is right, use more paragraphs; it was pretty hard to read. But keep writing. I like vampire stories hehe. |
| 2006-04-04 01:29:23 |
VampricLust
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Great story! I love vampires...always been a big turn on for me. Let me know if you decide to write a sequel! |
| 2006-04-04 09:33:11 |
VampricLust
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that was yummy !!!!!!!!!! |