| 2006-04-09 21:48:57 |
my beautiful younger sister
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Very Good |
| 2006-04-10 00:45:15 |
my beautiful younger sister
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the plot is good but it was really "wham bam thank you mam" more than anything too fast. slow down and make it longer. other than that great! |
| 2006-04-10 01:17:26 |
my beautiful younger sister
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i like evermuch thanh you |
| 2006-04-10 23:02:35 |
my beautiful younger sister
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thanks ppl for the comments and the ratings, this was my first story as you have read at the top i wrote this one short cuz i wanted to see if you people liked my style of writing, i'm going to write a second part, when i have time, and anonmous reader ( no clue how to spell anonomous) i dont live in illinois its just a story its called fiction |
| 2006-04-10 23:06:33 |
my beautiful younger sister
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and btw the next story will include beastialaty and if u guys dont like that i have one thing to say to you, DONT READ IT |