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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-07-02 01:04:11 | The Awakening of a Slut: Samantha | the end? |
| 2006-07-08 05:33:45 | The Awakening of a Slut: Samantha | Ever hear of an open-ending? |
| 2006-07-08 21:35:07 | The Awakening of a Slut: Samantha | Well ok, Samantha I think we get the idea that she is a dirty, bitch, slut, whore. Because you repeatedly use those words. It really took away from your story. Now unless you had intended this story to be a diary entry Learn to write dialog! You do seem to have a flair for words, but don't flood the story with them! You have to remember the majority of the readers are between 18 and 20 yrs old, while some will understand them, I have to say that most will not. You have to discribe the senses, Site, smell, taste, touch, and hearing! we are not there, and this is not a movie, so you have to tell us about them to let us feel what she went through. The next time you write a story, remember the 5 senses, and don't flood the page with bullshit. I think you can write, but you need to calm dow |
| 2006-07-10 22:59:19 | The Awakening of a Slut: Samantha | Beautifully written! Loved it... |
| 2006-07-18 06:17:19 | The Awakening of a Slut: Samantha | Regarding Pexton's comment, I wonder why some men even bother showing how stupid and vain they are in public. If you have to lower your lever to adapt it to an illiterate group of readers...well...you might as well stop writing. BUT PLEASE DON'T. Your style is great and unusual. I love it. Jack |