| 2006-08-13 23:22:09 |
The Crush
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5/10. I know it's a fantasy and I should suspend disbelief, but . . . an adult wouldn't behave in such a manner, only in the mind of a fantasizing young girl. you forgot to describe what the characters look like . .. you and the teacher you have a crush on . . .you have tremendous talent as a writer. when you're older and have more life experience, you'll probably be as good of a writer as anyone of this forum. |
| 2006-08-14 21:22:46 |
The Crush
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thanks..and believe me i know i need improvement > |
| 2006-10-03 17:53:35 |
The Crush
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I WAS JERKIN OFF THE WHOLE TIME! |
| 2006-10-24 19:10:00 |
The Crush
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there wasnt enough detail it got me wet but it wasnt enough to get me off |
| 2007-05-26 10:18:50 |
The Crush
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to quick needs detail but good start |