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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-07-29 18:02:32 | Brittney's Secret lust | i know adding the spell check feature to a word processing program is expensive... like only professionals can afford it.. but you really should look into one. or maybe, if you have time to visit paris/london/atlantis, you could go to one of those museums having that relic people used to use.. what was it called?? oh yeah, a d-i-c-t-i-o-n-a-r-y |
| 2006-07-29 22:35:18 | Brittney's Secret lust | You switch from the past tense, to the present tense. And the narraration, spelling, and constant quotation marks are fucking annoying. Seriously the narration sucked bawlz. |
| 2006-07-29 23:02:36 | Brittney's Secret lust | JEAUSS CHRIST I DONT KNOW WHAT TO SAY HOW BOUT GET A LIFE! SOME OF U GOING OMG THE SPELLING WAS WRONG OO LIKE MOST PEOPLE WILL CARE ITS A GOOD STORY |
| 2006-07-30 16:27:23 | Brittney's Secret lust | Eternal, keep the story in the past tense, the ENTIRE story. Don't switch back and forth between tenses. Also, make sure you stay in the third person, not second or first, and don't evaluate their thoughts nearly as much, no one gives a shit what she thinks about her body, just what she does with it. And only use quotation marks, when a character is speaking. It looks fucking retarded when you put quotations around, "do it." Unless someone here is retarded they know what it means without the quotations there |
| 2006-07-30 21:50:29 | Brittney's Secret lust | 2/10 . . . Constructive critism, since I think you enjoy writing and want to learn your art. 1. choose a tense and stick to it. 2. spell check your work. if you don't have word, find an on-line friend here to help you. 3. Put an extra space (hit the return key twice) between paragraphs 4. unless its part of your story, don't make your female characters so vain 5. proofread your work i hope you wanted feedback, since you are allowing comments on your story. keep working, plugging away . . . |