| 2006-08-01 19:59:41 |
Brittney's Secret lust
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good but it ended when it got real good |
| 2006-08-01 20:09:22 |
Brittney's Secret lust
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Was great. |
| 2006-08-02 01:12:32 |
Brittney's Secret lust
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It was all good up to the end when the mother caught them but i want to kno what happened next did she join or what |
| 2006-08-02 01:57:22 |
Brittney's Secret lust
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im just gonna stick with the help u need. USE SPELL CHECK!! Also in your last few paragraphs you switch from present tense to past tense. |
| 2006-08-02 06:11:05 |
Brittney's Secret lust
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Nice story, but I dont think it needed them getting caught at the end. Why are people sometimes so mean to their characters? |