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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2006-08-27 19:40:17 | Carlos | Excellent writing! vivid and ~smooth~ Why am i finding this story way down in the less read stuff? Want some feedback? ok... At the beginning, i was a little lost, wondering if i had missed a chapter or something so i checked...nope. So, can i challenge you to use some of your skills to develope the characters a bit... it's like foreplay, you know? set the scene, and let us know perhaps why he thinks she hates him? does he have a latin-temper... etc. great work. -blade- |
| 2007-03-17 00:10:59 | Carlos | big4u |
| 2006-08-12 20:57:56 | the wedding_(0) | Mediocre at best |
| 2006-08-13 10:36:50 | the wedding_(0) | poor dialogue. story is not bad, but your sentence structure is hard to follow read some of the other stories. |
| 2006-08-13 23:17:00 | the wedding_(0) | could be good...descirbe the sex more though |