| 2006-11-22 00:20:48 |
My Start of sexual Experience Part 1
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I got bored one forth of the way through. Learn to spell dumbasses and learn to write descent stories! |
| 2006-12-15 22:22:55 |
My Start of sexual Experience Part 1
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don't waste your time faggot |
| 2007-10-30 13:58:14 |
My Start of sexual Experience Part 1
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sorry it just made me laugh so much.... dude, it was awful.. |
| 2006-08-04 08:59:56 |
Magic Wands (so to speak) parts 1, 2, and 3
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Its OK, but really hard to read. If you are going to take off with other peoples charactors, you need to be pretty faithful to the setting and style. The structure was painfully amaturish. You need to learn how to write dialogue, break up paragraphs, punctuate, and edit. Try again. |
| 2006-08-04 15:33:17 |
Magic Wands (so to speak) parts 1, 2, and 3
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Dude I don't care wut anyone says, this was superb! You should contine this fanfic series man bcause you have the characters down pretty well. |