| 2004-08-10 17:50:58 |
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I really like this story. It folws but it has a few typos. Keep it coming. |
| 2005-09-14 18:52:37 |
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iliked it tho if i never meet some one i wouldnt meet at a hotel its one of the rules ive set my self and read online but i liked it, god ive never had nippel clamps used me yet wounder if my master will oww |
| 2005-11-01 17:04:52 |
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Promising... |
| 2006-09-01 22:23:50 |
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Hot hot hot. |
| 2004-02-14 01:33:52 |
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Nice beginning. You took the time to create a believable world and populate it with believable characters. Dialogue is good and moves the story along while revealing something of the characters too. Good job |