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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2004-02-15 16:25:15 | DOM SIR part 2_(1) | everything master roth says is true! this is making a very good scene. keep it up and i may find out who you are and pay you for more stories. keep up the good work. from Krim. |
| 2004-08-10 17:57:41 | DOM SIR part 2_(1) | A little shot this time but great none the less. |
| 2006-09-01 22:30:26 | DOM SIR part 2_(1) | I read that in about 2 seconds. What the fuck? Why is it so short? |
| 2004-02-11 13:41:34 | DOM SIR part 3 | I waited till I read the third part to comment. I think the story is very good though it ended abruptly. I find it interesting that there was no real sex in the end and I wonder will there be a part 4? |
| 2004-02-14 01:48:47 | DOM SIR part 3 | I agree with Lilly that the story ended too soon. When you hear that sort of criticism you must ask yourself if you've given the reader all the information they needed to understand the characters choices they make. Otherwise the actions the characters take at the end seem to come out of nowhere and appear to be more a way to end the story than actually being faithful to the characters you've created. Take some time and write a few different endings starting from, "What do you think?" Ask yourself all sorts of questions, does he have a wife? other slaves? is he impotent? The answers don't have to find their way into the story but the result of you asking these questions will show in your ability to continue the story to a more satisfying conclusion. Usually I charge for this advice |