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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2007-07-08 17:17:28 | The Ball Game-pt3 | Readin this story, ur actionz reminded me alot of ME. sukkin dickz Nd gettin fukked is wat i do 2. While these things are happenin, my mind is resistin but my body is goin along wit it, just as urs did. Then when i reflect on these thingz dat i have done, i cry, blame myself, blame the guyz for takin advantage of me, just as u did. i keepin tellin myself dat ill stop my sluttish wayz but when a guy approachez me itz a whole diffrent story. 2 some of da guyz in my neighborhood im known as a smut. |
| 2007-07-08 18:48:13 | The Ball Game-pt3 | it hurtz 2 hear dat but i've come 2 realize dat itz true. But the good newz is dat i havent fukked anyone or sukked anyone'z dick in a long time. Nikki do u think it is possible dat i could eva loose my smut reputation 4 good? |
| 2006-09-20 14:05:31 | What are freinds for | Brilliant. It got right to the Good Stuff! What a twisted ending; Very Talented! Keep them coming... |
| 2006-09-20 20:53:34 | What are freinds for | you suck |
| 2006-09-21 02:13:11 | What are freinds for | Sounds like you were trying to rush a story. Almost like it's more of a summary. Good storyline, though. Nice ending. Straight to the sex. Three things good for three points each from me. The last point for a perfect ten is detail to the story, and to the grammar. Your paragraphs were too long. Try just 3 to 6 setences each unless they're all about one thing. Don't mix two events like licking and fucking together. Between the licking and fucking, put an empty line. Just some tips. Still a nice score. Have fun. |