| 2006-09-25 15:37:48 |
What are freinds for
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i bet you like the taste of shit |
| 2006-09-22 18:17:05 |
Sins of the Father B
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I absolutely hate all your stories for the same reason: the verb tense you use is very odd. Everything is done in a passive way. Instead of "using it, loving it so good" say "your pussy feels so good RIGHT NOW". Make the story progress as if it is happening now and now in the past. Look at other stories on the site to see what I mean |
| 2006-09-22 20:48:20 |
Sins of the Father B
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If you hate them so much why do you look at every one of them,then rate them low. Do you have a bad story fetish? Its ok. I understand. Drink the kool-aid please. |
| 2006-10-04 21:01:54 |
Sins of the Father B
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if it's not constructive criticism, ignore it. Your story is great! |
| 2006-12-17 08:14:40 |
Sins of the Father B
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ممكن... فديو... |