| 2006-12-05 16:05:07 |
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Did you ever learn that at the start of a sentence you're supposed to capitalize the first word? Where did you go to school? Awful grammar makes for lousy reading; remember that. Just because somebody is getting fucked doesn't mean you can write your tale like a 5-year-old. Terrible style. |
| 2006-12-06 10:43:38 |
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hi |
| 2006-12-06 17:18:57 |
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Nice story, well done. I don't think the idiot who was brining you down for your use of grammar has the slightest idea of what he is talking about. He mentioned that you didn't use capitals at the start of every sentence, do you think he noticed that he didn't do this either. I feel the story was good and for the other reader who commented, it wasn't rape she wanted it! Some people need to get a clue. |
| 2006-12-06 18:43:02 |
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I love the story it was very interesting.... |
| 2006-12-07 00:51:37 |
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technically, an d legally, it would be considered rape in 49 out of 50 states here in the USA...only becuase she is underaged...its called statuatory rape...it does not matter if she wanted it or not...she doesn't have the legal capacity to consent to any sexual activity...as for the story line, very interesting |