| 2006-12-21 17:15:55 |
Two Sexy Sisters For Diablo
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I loved it but, you could tone down a bit on the alliteration. |
| 2006-12-22 02:40:01 |
Two Sexy Sisters For Diablo
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LIked the story, but thought is was badly overwritten, at times even pretentious. Having read some of your other stories I think you should stick to something ornate. Also, the epilogue needed forshadowing, it came as too much of a surprise. |
| 2006-12-22 14:40:26 |
Two Sexy Sisters For Diablo
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You should take a speed reading course. |
| 2006-12-23 07:48:38 |
Two Sexy Sisters For Diablo
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badly overwritten.. I enjoy such nebulous, self aggrandizing comments, as much as people whom apply for a job must, when told by avaricious liars; I'm sorry, you are "over qualified" for this particular position. |
| 2006-12-23 09:16:14 |
Two Sexy Sisters For Diablo
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too much of a surprise? Isn't a surprise a surprise because you don't expect it? 10/10 |