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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2007-02-25 11:58:12 | harry potter fun in the park | Just watch your tenses. You move from past tense to present and back again a lot. It makes the story rather annoying to read. I didn't even bother getting past the first 3 paragraphs. "Harry had turned 17 the day before this all happens." Harry had turned 17 the day before this all HAPPENED. |
| 2007-02-28 10:39:37 | harry potter fun in the park | guy below, who cares bout grammar? |
| 2007-03-02 13:27:45 | harry potter fun in the park | I agree with grammar guy. There are those of us who know how to use the english language correctly and it annoys us to have to read some of the illiterate drivel that is spouted on this site. Being a good writer isn't just about having a story to tell. It's also about telling it well. |
| 2007-03-02 16:18:18 | harry potter fun in the park | the story is both past tense and present most stories are |
| 2007-03-03 10:48:47 | harry potter fun in the park | It's fine to change tenses in the middle of a story....not in the middle of a sentence, idiot. |