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Comments from READER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2007-02-28 04:00:00 | The drive home_(1) | fuck mate what a great story. Write more Please 10/10 |
| 2007-02-28 04:26:08 | The drive home_(1) | All of you people criticising the author on spelling and "grammer" need to take your own advice. It's grammar. Fucking hypocrites. Besides, the spelling and grammar in this story was much better than half of the others I've read on here, and were hardly an issue. Good job. |
| 2007-02-28 19:03:45 | The drive home_(1) | yep I loved it...definitely read a lot worse re grammar on this site so shut up and enjoy...or write your own |
| 2007-02-28 19:40:31 | The drive home_(1) | Alright, let me put it into terms you might better understand: If you were to watch a comedy skit, just one of those quick 10 minute ones, and every few words out of the comedian's mouth was "fuck," even if it didn't apply and didn't really help the content, you'd get fairly bored of it, right? Well, "fuck" is used as a descriptive word, just like "tight" and "wet." Problem is, if you over use any of those words, the story gets boring. Your story bored me for said reason. I applaud the content, but there are a few things you could change. First, cut out the parents coming home. Even if it happened, you only have one sentence, so it just slows the story down. Second, try making a pun at the end about what grade you got on your exam or something. Finally, cut out the last sentence. |
| 2007-02-28 21:26:48 | The drive home_(1) | Finally made my account...The last post belonged to me, by the way. ^_^ -Merc |