| 2007-10-05 23:01:43 |
Lunchtime Love
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im absolutely revolted by retards whose comments seem to be about as intelligible as dogs. good erotic story and try for a longer chapter. 8/10 |
| 2007-10-05 23:53:46 |
Lunchtime Love
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Very good, well writen but use the enter key a few more times, but other than that two thumbs up |
| 2007-10-06 01:15:10 |
Lunchtime Love
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I must say, you have a talent. I really enjoyed this story, which is rare. I also agree, next time try splitting it into more paragraphs(I bet you have heard that a lot...) and keep the good grammar coming, it is very much appreciated. +10 |
| 2007-10-06 02:58:56 |
Lunchtime Love
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Thank you for the story. Definitely believable. Please keep writing. ANy more stories? |
| 2007-10-06 07:02:49 |
Lunchtime Love
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Good story but paragraphs might be better, try making it longer too |