| 2007-05-07 15:50:02 |
Allison's Uncle
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nice |
| 2007-05-07 20:25:11 |
Allison's Uncle
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awesome, needs to be a little bit longer though 9/10 |
| 2007-05-07 20:34:19 |
Allison's Uncle
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prtty good |
| 2007-05-07 23:27:50 |
Allison's Uncle
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really hot story...wanted to know if you...i mwan she, is a virgin...he poked her pussy but you didn't elaborate...gfave you a 10...higher if possible |
| 2007-05-08 03:20:13 |
Allison's Uncle
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Pretty good story but execution was lacking. Really, really short you should definitely add a lot more detail to the actual fucking and if you want even have more details before the action starts to take place. You have a good story in mind but it seems like this was written by a child. I know this comment is pretty harsh I did actually enjoy the story though so it's not all bad. You have a lot of work to do on your writing skills though. 6/10 |