| 2007-07-21 01:17:39 |
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great story structure and segways. fucking rediculous use of the word pussy-hole. I damb near laghed my ass off! great story though. |
| 2007-07-21 18:40:43 |
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I agree with the writer on 07/06. Too much jerking off bullshit. I didn't get past about the 4th paragraph--I had read enough.
No rating--Doesn't deserve one. |
| 2007-07-24 14:31:54 |
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dude wen u write a story get to the good stuff quick the jackin off shit got me grossed out by lyk the 3d paragraph....but other than that the story was good!!!! |
| 2007-07-26 08:59:05 |
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this story was very disappointing...it would get really hot and intimate, than you would try to throw a joke in there and ruin the entire image...4/10 |
| 2007-07-26 16:51:18 |
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thsi guy sounds like a hilbilly caliing his sister a virginil something too much jackin off to |