| 2007-08-21 23:05:25 |
Little Miss
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I'm going to have to give this story an 8/10, for a few reasons. First and foremost, I have to agree that his story was not incest. Not in the slightest, though that fact didn't really bother me other then it was why I clicked it at the time. Also, though I usually am the one smashing people for complaining about writing errors, I have to say that this story would have been much easier to read if it had been seperated into paragraphs in the second half. Finally, if there is to be a second part, it would be nice if you could spend more time on the detail when they're having sex, so as to bring more into it. Other then that, this was a very good story! /| MidnightFiend /| |