| 2007-08-25 17:20:37 |
After School part1
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OKAY |
| 2007-09-04 13:48:58 |
After School part1
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Your punctuation is godforsakenly atrocious to the point that it completely detracts from the rest of what is written here, however awful it may also be. |
| 2007-08-06 10:37:23 |
After School Part2
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After school part2 doesn't track with After school part1, seem to be different stories. |
| 2007-08-07 03:45:22 |
After School Part2
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Needs a tremendous amount of work to make it at least a little bit interesting. Too run-of-the mil. |
| 2007-08-07 06:43:36 |
After School Part2
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not that good same old and yeah it doesnt carry on from after school part 1 |