| 2007-09-02 00:44:16 |
Camryn: C10
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it was the storie ive been waiting for but.. its just missing somthing..... u couldve made it alot longer. but i guess at least u ended it with sex and not a dead kid in his bedroom while his fuck buddy and girlfreind move away. anyway ill give it a 7 but seriously there is somthing missing i strongly recomend wrighting an 11 |
| 2007-09-02 22:20:34 |
Camryn: C10
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i really dont like the little sister i definetly would not let my little sister fuck my guy just not right sharing sucks lol anyways good story besides that |
| 2007-09-05 00:54:02 |
Camryn: C10
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That was pretty awsome. your a talented writer and dont listen to those idiots who mock it. the story line was great and your descriptions were inspired... overall id give the series a 8 or 9 out of ten... cuz everyone knows nothing is perfect. if you want some idea's or anything like that i suggest you read the series called "camp" its my favourite on here closely followed by this. good job. Oh and the spelling... pretty good but it could do with some improvement too, not too hard, just find a spell checker |
| 2007-09-15 00:56:04 |
Camryn: C10
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dude, i think your story was great. i did not find it to be very arousing but i absolutely loved the story line. this is a 10 in my book. |
| 2007-09-15 00:56:04 |
Camryn: C10
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dude, i think your story was great. i did not find it to be very arousing but i absolutely loved the story line. this is a 10 in my book. |